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There was once a woman named Terra. She was a dedicated mother, who provided her children with everything they would ever need: food, shelter, medicine…

But as all children do, they rebelled—violently. They hacked off her gorgeous hair, left gashes in her beautiful skin, and covered her in rancid trash…

And still, she loved and provided for them.

Then one day, they found their drug.

It was black, sludgy, sticky, poisonous, yet they treasured it. Becoming addicted, they breathed it, burned it, adored it. They'd pay any cost, whether it be loss of life, harming themselves, or slowly killing their mother.

Over the years, Terra became feverish from exposure to the drugs, she could no longer provide as well for her children as they fought over the addictive substance amongst themselves.

One of her children apparently became worried about her health.

"Mother? Are you okay?"

"Yes," came the pained reply, "I am well."

But the worried child, after some extensive examination, came to the conclusion that she was not well, she was singing a drawn out death song.

Her child said it would help, and it really tried. It used less of the drug, tried to convince the others to stop, but her child was still addicted.

Sadly, she watched through dimming eyes as her children destroyed themselves through the addiction.

What foolish, foolish children, only one was wise enough to realize its wrongs, but it was already too late. What the rest didn't realize was that after Terra had died, they would soon follow with no one left to provide for them.

Terra is also known as Earth, her children known as humans, and the drug, known as oil.

The Addiction ended it all.
Positively addicted to oil, that's the world today.

Had a spark of an idea, quickly wrote it down... The single worried child representes the few humans who do care about Terra, Mother Earth.

Enjoy, comment to tell me how much you think it needs change, or even if you just love it! :meow:
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Dreamcloud010 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014  Student
I absolutely love the earth and nature! Im on a team and we always cheer when we win and instead everyone was on their phones, texting the person that was a few seats away from them. I dont bring my phone everywhere, my team thinks im crazy for not doing so, when someone looks up and realizes that im not on my phone(Because she tried to text me) and she asks why dont you bring your phone everywhere. I answer
 "I like to enjoy things without the use of technology." I turn around and point out a beautiful landscape and she looks disgusted and reply's,
 "Its just trees and bushes and sky nothing too exciting about it!"

  I may be apart of this generation, but this generation is a bunch of idiots.

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!! I feel that the earth is slowly dieing, we have to do a persuasive speech thing and im doing it on how Fracking harms the enviroment.
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skrewdupandaround Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2010
thats really cleaver!
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Nannaa Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Student General Artist
It's brilliant! It's absolutely brilliant. The simplicity really emphasizes the depth in the story, the message is very well dramatized.
In many cases, such as this, simplicity really helps making a message memorable and obvious. It's a touching story cause it's so true. I've written some works in school projects about our oil addiction, the ceasing oil reserves etc and it's really frightening. I got many reactions from people who had no idea about the problem, so I guess I opened up a few eyes. Just like I think you do with this, or at least inspire!
I hope our governments and multinational companies will take the issue seriously and act more rationally. It's not only that we're destroying the earth, but we're also digging our own grave economically, politically etc. When the prices rise, food and basic commodities will get very expensive and people will suffer, which will cause huge conflicts worldwide. Haha I sound like some apocalyptical prophet :lmao: But it's true, which is what's so scary. And the fact that so many people are unaware.

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Great work!! :w00t:
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you! :bow: With this piece, even if people disagree, if I at least get them to talk, it's doing it's job. :)
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Nannaa Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010  Student General Artist
True :)
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HoldenInvisible Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010
Whoa! A totally impressive story! Nicely Done!
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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HoldenInvisible Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2010
Np! =)
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Mez10000 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2010  Student Writer
Simple, yet painfully effective.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. And thanks so much for the :+fav: too! :dance:
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Mez10000 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2010  Student Writer
You're welcome! :)
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BurningIceWolf Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010
O: whoa that was beautiful
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Really? I'm still revising this, it will be much different soon. But thanks! :D
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BurningIceWolf Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2010
I started crying reading this. Sorry I didn't answer sooner, I never saw that you relpied
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
O_o Crying you say? Don't think I've heard that yet. :D But if it was a good read for you, I'm glad. (S'okay about the late reply thing ^^;)
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Lena-The-Angel Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2010
Wow this is so beautiful! I love it!
I think, though, that this piece would have benefitted a great deal from more description. You don't do earth justice with the little description you've included here, in my opinion.
I also think this is very simple. Whilst that isn't always a bad thing, i think in this case a more detailed, maybe, piece would have worked better.
Overall though, fantastic! :)
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D Well, am currently in the process of revising this, so expect improvement soon. ;)
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PhsycoTatie Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010  Student Digital Artist
I love this.I love how it says how slowly people are killing the earth and theirselves
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :dummy:
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PhsycoTatie Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010  Student Digital Artist
ur welcome
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Amy-Viz Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! Well done. I wouldn't change a thing.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :meow: Although I am revising it a bit.
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Amy-Viz Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Let me know when you revise it. I would love to read it.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Sure thing! If you watch me, I'll notify my watchers whenever I revise a story (which is not often).
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Ryuu-Izaki Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010
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I thought it was very good and sad, but then got to the end and just, well, lost interest.

I'm not going to go into a rant about this pollution thing, but lets just say I disliked the end.

That's only me, but I bet lots of others like it as well! Good work!
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :meow:
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IckleVoldiePoo Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Very well written, nicely done! I wasn't sure I was going to like it at first, but the message won me over :love:
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! :dummy: Another fan! :worship: Thanks for the praise and comment!
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MyRepentance Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010
SO, tell me.......

Do you have plastics in your home? Possibly perhaps in your computer?

Do you use electricity?

Do you drive?

What do you use to heat your home with?

Your work is not productive. You would do more for poor ol' mother earth if you, yourself would INVENT something to replace oil, or do without it, and all its products and show others how to.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yes I know, I myself am an addicted child, this story may in no way be productive for anyone who reads it, but I hope that by writing this, I can at least express my worries and find an audience who is willing to listen.

Thanks for the comment MyRepentance! :dummy: It's appreciated, I like your view on this. :)
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MyRepentance Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010
What I find troubling is the growing and widespread perception that we, mankind, is some kind of plague on an otherwise pristine earth.

Man is just as 'natural' an animal here as any other. We cannot, will not destroy life, nor the environment. It is far more resilient and powerful than we.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yes I believe humans are natural, all I'm sayin' is we need to discipline ourselves and be careful about what we create, whether or not or creations harm the earth we call home.
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Lil-0dd1ty Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010
"poor ol' mother earth?" with all due respect, as appealing as i find this piece, mother terra is going to PWN us once we get too naughty. it's romantic to see her as a withering mother, but the fact of the matter is, she's a lot more powerful than we are; we, mother terra's youngest, most spoiled children, are in for the biggest natural spanking of our existence...!
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MyRepentance Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010
'Mother Earth' is but the creation, it is the Creator that will be doing the spanking.
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Lil-0dd1ty Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010
well, call me a pagan if you will, but all in all it's the same thing to me.
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inknalcohol Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010   Writer
As I started to read this, I immediately felt like I was dropped into a kids story book. Aside from some word choices, this could very well be a kids story. Kinda has the same feel as the Lorax (which is by far my favorite Seuss book).

You do so well of painting the picture and explaining what's going on, but I think it would have more effect if you didn't explain it at the end. Don't tell us what it is. I'd already drawn the necessary conclusion by the time I got there. Leave the explanation of what this is about for your comments.

Just my opinion. I just think it would have a more extreme effect on the reader.

-Reaper

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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thanks for the opinion. I've been told a few times the ending is just too... meh, er, sudden and explanatory. As I type I'm revising this a bit with my Author Mentor (especially the end), so expect a revision soon! ;)

Thanks again! :dummy:
~WLI
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inknalcohol Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010   Writer
Keep me posted.

-Reaper
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Always! :D
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010  Student Writer
i would fav it a million times if i could
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
A comment is worth a million :+fav:s! Thanks for the comment! :dummy:
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Student Writer
no problemo
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Azureseilue Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010
Life is hard...And need more Cares..
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly, we do.

Thanks for the comment! :dummy:
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PenguinRockMySocks Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2010
Oh, wow, this is just... wow. I LOVE it. You really... described the problem with humans and earth today in such a brilliant, emotional way, and it's just a fantastic poem. I can't explain how much I like this poem, so I'm just going to say; well done, you should be proud. :)
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gee thanks! :bow:
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PenguinRockMySocks Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010
No problem!
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KreepingSpawn Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
someone feature this as a DD, please?! such an important message in a great little package.

well done.
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WarriorLoverInc Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :bow:
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